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03-23-2004, 11:56 AM | #1 |
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OT please critique my resume
I haven’t any luck getting an interview since I graduated in December. I'm beginning to think there’s something wrong with my resume (I Know IT sucks but I haven’t had a single bite). Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.
Objective: A position in Computer Networking Skills: MCP 2000 server, MCP 2000 Workstation,and A+ certified Windows 2000, Windows XP, Windows 9x, Linux Desktop, TCP/IP, DNS, DHCP, HTML, Word, Access, PowerPoint, Excel,and Adobe PhotoShop Education: BS Degree, Information Technology, Dec. 2003 College name city, State AS Degree, Network Engineering, May 2002 College name city, State Experience: 2002-Present Company city, State Computer support Technician Support internal software, printing, and network connectivity issues. Provide internal customer service to 200+ end users. Develop and instruct quarterly student workshops. 2002 previous Company city, State Computer Assistant (CO-OP) Supported internal software and network connectivity related issues. Prepared daily software, hardware and network configurations, as required by scheduled classes. Tested wireless network connectivity throughout the college’s campus on a bimonthly basis. 2001-2002 previous previous Company city, State Hardware Technician (CO-OP) Troubleshot problems in hardware, software, computer installations, and network configurations. Installed network solutions which included routers, switches, servers, workstations, terminals, printers, UPS devices, patch panels, Ethernet jacks, and CAT5 cable runs. Acquired a better understanding of integrated system solutions such as Windows/Linux/Unix by performing daily operations in a heterogeneous environment.
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03-23-2004, 11:58 AM | #2 |
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Its not you; Its just that your job has be outsourced.
Everyone is in the same boat pretty much. |
03-23-2004, 12:02 PM | #3 |
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Get rid of the objective and the skills sections. Instead, use a Professional Profile that includes your skills and highlights your strengths as a possible candidate.
The objective is kind of redundant and should not be used. You would include your objective as part of a cover letter. Think about it, since you are either handing over your resume or sending it, people know you are looking for a job. Oh, and I am not positive, but I think "troubleshot" is not a word. Good luck. My $0.02 |
03-23-2004, 12:11 PM | #4 |
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Try to highlight your "soft skills" interaction with internal cleints, communications etc. there are a lot of peope who can list software and hardware skills, but employers are looking for a blance of technical and people skills. Those are the jobs they can't outsource.
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03-23-2004, 12:12 PM | #5 |
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Throw in something snazzy like
"Has a 10 inch ...." Make that the title, it will grab their attention. |
03-23-2004, 12:14 PM | #6 |
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03-23-2004, 12:18 PM | #7 |
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Objective is one of my biggest pet peeves... your objective is to land a ****ing job. Duh. As for the skills, talk less about non-relevant stuff like Photoshop and talk up things that are directly relevant to the field, or even better to the particular company you are applying to.
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03-23-2004, 12:20 PM | #8 | |
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03-23-2004, 12:27 PM | #9 | |
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Thanks for all the ideas so far.
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03-23-2004, 12:32 PM | #10 |
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I don't think there's such a thing as an MCP for 2000 server, and an MCP for 2000 workstation. You are either an MCP, or you are not. You get an MCP by passing workstation or server.
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03-23-2004, 01:07 PM | #11 |
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He's an MCP who has passed Workstation and Server.
The Office apps under skills are unnecessary to present: If you're a server/network guy, minimal Office skills are assumed. You tell what you did in your jobs, but you didn't tell what you ACCOMPLISHED. What did you do to make your employer better off to have you? |
03-23-2004, 01:36 PM | #12 | |
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Your final line "Acquired a better understanding..." is more indicative of what you accomplished and what you are capable of doing. Emphasize the progress you've made from one job to the next... I'm not in the IT field, but I think that you're better off not thinking so specifically/technically about each individual task you were required to do. If everyone applying for the job has similar experience and levels of education, you need to set yourself apart from the crowd. |
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03-23-2004, 01:40 PM | #13 |
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make a somewhat distinct objective. It appears as if you don't care what you do. You need to alter it for each position you send it to.
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03-23-2004, 03:12 PM | #14 |
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I appreciate the feedback everyone.
I used MCP for both server and workstation to let the prospective reader know I passed both tests. I put the office apps in as skills because I currently provide user support for those apps (should this be clarified-maybe in my work experience/ or just take them out?). Also I change the objective for each position. The resume I posted is my generic template. For example if I was applying for a network admin position my objective would read… A position in Information technology with an emphasis on Network Administration <-- is this any good? |
03-23-2004, 03:17 PM | #15 |
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Your experience section sounds like your an IT robot, put a little humanity in there.
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03-23-2004, 03:33 PM | #16 |
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I disagree about the objective line. Perhaps it's just a difference of industry, but when I hire for my team, I look for an objective. It can give you a glimpse into someone's long term goals, career interests, what they are looking for (Mid level, senior level, entry level), focus and even writing skills.
The objective is not just to "get the job," but to see if the company is a good match for you, as well. Remember, a resume just gets you noticed -an interview gets you the job. Again, though, it could be different for the IT sector. |
03-23-2004, 04:09 PM | #17 |
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To seperated. Just like everyone else.
You need to start with a summary of qualifications like example -Five plus years of experience in satellite systems technologies -Proficient in Microsoft Suite which include: Power Point, Word perfect, Excel, Outlook -Qualified on several satellite systems including DSP, MSX, GPS, IRIDIUM -Self-motivated, reliable and creative individual with strong technical and organizational skills. -Detail oriented and very familiar with Unix, Perl, STI’s, OS/Comet and Windows NT. Use words that make a positive impact and stick in the mind of the reader. Think about what the employer is looking for. Individualize your resume for each and every job you apply for. Look into the company itself read up on what they are up to. Orient your resume to highlight your strenthgs according to the company's needs. |
03-23-2004, 04:15 PM | #18 |
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Companies are looking for self moviated individuals
Email your resume follow up with a fax and mail in a hard copy. Take the time to make it look good (get the nice paper and a clear cover case for it) Make sure you have your contact info as the header example: John Doe [email protected] 123 Street Apt 123 (123) 456-7898 CityPlace, ST 12345 Keep it to the point don't include skills or experience the employer is not intrested in. |
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