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Old 03-23-2004, 11:56 AM   #1
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Default OT please critique my resume

I havenít any luck getting an interview since I graduated in December. I'm beginning to think thereís something wrong with my resume (I Know IT sucks but I havenít had a single bite). Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Objective:

A position in Computer Networking

Skills:

MCP 2000 server, MCP 2000 Workstation,and A+ certified

Windows 2000, Windows XP, Windows 9x, Linux Desktop,
TCP/IP, DNS, DHCP, HTML, Word, Access, PowerPoint,
Excel,and Adobe PhotoShop

Education:

BS Degree, Information Technology, Dec. 2003
College name city, State

AS Degree, Network Engineering, May 2002
College name city, State


Experience:

2002-Present

Company city, State
Computer support Technician


Support internal software, printing, and network
connectivity issues.

Provide internal customer service to 200+ end users.

Develop and instruct quarterly student workshops.

2002

previous Company city, State
Computer Assistant (CO-OP)

Supported internal software and network
connectivity related issues.

Prepared daily software, hardware and network
configurations, as required by scheduled classes.

Tested wireless network connectivity throughout
the collegeís campus on a bimonthly basis.

2001-2002

previous previous Company city, State
Hardware Technician (CO-OP)


Troubleshot problems in hardware, software,
computer installations, and network configurations.

Installed network solutions which included routers,
switches, servers, workstations, terminals, printers,
UPS devices, patch panels, Ethernet jacks, and
CAT5 cable runs.

Acquired a better understanding of integrated system
solutions such as Windows/Linux/Unix by performing
daily operations in a heterogeneous environment.
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Old 03-23-2004, 11:58 AM   #2
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Its not you; Its just that your job has be outsourced.



Everyone is in the same boat pretty much.
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:02 PM   #3
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Get rid of the objective and the skills sections. Instead, use a Professional Profile that includes your skills and highlights your strengths as a possible candidate.

The objective is kind of redundant and should not be used. You would include your objective as part of a cover letter. Think about it, since you are either handing over your resume or sending it, people know you are looking for a job.

Oh, and I am not positive, but I think "troubleshot" is not a word.

Good luck.

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Old 03-23-2004, 12:11 PM   #4
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Try to highlight your "soft skills" interaction with internal cleints, communications etc. there are a lot of peope who can list software and hardware skills, but employers are looking for a blance of technical and people skills. Those are the jobs they can't outsource.
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:12 PM   #5
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Throw in something snazzy like

"Has a 10 inch ...."


Make that the title, it will grab their attention.
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:14 PM   #6
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Drexel Grad?

<----Current Drexel Student
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:18 PM   #7
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Objective is one of my biggest pet peeves... your objective is to land a ****ing job. Duh. As for the skills, talk less about non-relevant stuff like Photoshop and talk up things that are directly relevant to the field, or even better to the particular company you are applying to.
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:20 PM   #8
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Quote:
Originally posted by Fach
Drexel Grad?

<----Current Drexel Student
I wish, across the riverÖ Peirce
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:27 PM   #9
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Thanks for all the ideas so far.

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Originally posted by sorbee711
Objective is one of my biggest pet peeves... your objective is to land a ****ing job. Duh. As for the skills, talk less about non-relevant stuff like Photoshop and talk up things that are directly relevant to the field, or even better to the particular company you are applying to.
See thatís whatís really frustrating to me. I have been changing the objective as well as the skills to target each job I apply for but its not doing anything (the resume I posted is my generic template).
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Old 03-23-2004, 12:32 PM   #10
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I don't think there's such a thing as an MCP for 2000 server, and an MCP for 2000 workstation. You are either an MCP, or you are not. You get an MCP by passing workstation or server.
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Old 03-23-2004, 01:07 PM   #11
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He's an MCP who has passed Workstation and Server.

The Office apps under skills are unnecessary to present: If you're a server/network guy, minimal Office skills are assumed.

You tell what you did in your jobs, but you didn't tell what you ACCOMPLISHED. What did you do to make your employer better off to have you?
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Old 03-23-2004, 01:36 PM   #12
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Quote:
Originally posted by imprezton

You tell what you did in your jobs, but you didn't tell what you ACCOMPLISHED. What did you do to make your employer better off to have you?
^^^
Your final line "Acquired a better understanding..." is more indicative of what you accomplished and what you are capable of doing. Emphasize the progress you've made from one job to the next...
I'm not in the IT field, but I think that you're better off not thinking so specifically/technically about each individual task you were required to do.

If everyone applying for the job has similar experience and levels of education, you need to set yourself apart from the crowd.
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Old 03-23-2004, 01:40 PM   #13
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make a somewhat distinct objective. It appears as if you don't care what you do. You need to alter it for each position you send it to.
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Old 03-23-2004, 03:12 PM   #14
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I appreciate the feedback everyone.

I used MCP for both server and workstation to let the prospective reader know I passed both tests. I put the office apps in as skills because I currently provide user support for those apps (should this be clarified-maybe in my work experience/ or just take them out?).

Also I change the objective for each position. The resume I posted is my generic template. For example if I was applying for a network admin position my objective would readÖ A position in Information technology with an emphasis on Network Administration <-- is this any good?
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Old 03-23-2004, 03:17 PM   #15
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Your experience section sounds like your an IT robot, put a little humanity in there.
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Old 03-23-2004, 03:33 PM   #16
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I disagree about the objective line. Perhaps it's just a difference of industry, but when I hire for my team, I look for an objective. It can give you a glimpse into someone's long term goals, career interests, what they are looking for (Mid level, senior level, entry level), focus and even writing skills.

The objective is not just to "get the job," but to see if the company is a good match for you, as well. Remember, a resume just gets you noticed -an interview gets you the job.

Again, though, it could be different for the IT sector.
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Old 03-23-2004, 04:09 PM   #17
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To seperated. Just like everyone else.
You need to start with a summary of qualifications like
example
-Five plus years of experience in satellite systems technologies
-Proficient in Microsoft Suite which include: Power Point, Word perfect, Excel, Outlook
-Qualified on several satellite systems including DSP, MSX, GPS, IRIDIUM
-Self-motivated, reliable and creative individual with strong technical and organizational skills.
-Detail oriented and very familiar with Unix, Perl, STIís, OS/Comet and Windows NT.

Use words that make a positive impact and stick in the mind of the reader. Think about what the employer is looking for. Individualize your resume for each and every job you apply for. Look into the company itself read up on what they are up to. Orient your resume to highlight your strenthgs according to the company's needs.
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Old 03-23-2004, 04:15 PM   #18
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Companies are looking for self moviated individuals
Email your resume follow up with a fax and mail in a hard copy.
Take the time to make it look good (get the nice paper and a clear cover case for it) Make sure you have your contact info as the header
example:
John Doe

JohnDoe@yahoo.com 123 Street Apt 123
(123) 456-7898 CityPlace, ST 12345

Keep it to the point don't include skills or experience the employer is not intrested in.
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