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Old 03-25-2005, 02:28 PM   #1
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Default OT Spelling/Grammar Nazis - Critique my resume!



I haven't updated my resume in about 4 years. Obviously I will include my phone numbers, address, etc.

Have at it - suggestions?



Emily C
<My address>
Phone: (cellular); (work); (home)
Email: <email>
¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬¬___________________________________ ________________________________
Summary
• Demonstrated achiever with superior proofing, editing, oral, written and interpersonal communication skills.
• Extensive experience with public speaking, performance and media relations.
• Strong leadership, mentoring and team building skills. Trained in organizational conflict resolution and crisis management.
• Expertise in developing social marketing campaigns and community involvement for organizational exposure.
• Proficient in web design, site maintenance and critique as well as online marketing.
• Highly organized and dedicated; able to handle multiple assignments under pressure and meet deadlines while maintaining a positive attitude.
__________________________________________________ _________________
Education
• Bachelor of Arts, Communication, Public Relations Emphasis
Pacific Lutheran University, Tacoma, Washington; May 2001
International Core Graduate
• Related Coursework: Advanced Public Relations, Public Speaking, Media Literacy, Media Law & Principles, Organizational Communication, Media Literacy, Human Cultural Diversity, Argumentation, Formal Logic and Public Speaking.
__________________________________________________ _________________
Related Experience
Director of Marketing and Sales, <Employer listing>(2002-Present)
• Responsible for all advertising, marketing, public relations, community involvement, sales collateral, publications, marketing materials, ad creation, media relations, strategic social marketing, editing, proofing, business collateral and correspondence for all four properties.
• Single-handedly sell, promote, book, organize and run all events for the Convention Center; including all client relations, contract comprisals and event particulars.
• Manage, motivate and lead convention center set up and housekeeping/catering staff.
• Collaborate with webmaster and partner companies to make resources readily available online for clients. Oversee website and ensure its management and functionality.

Membership Representative, Tacoma-Pierce County Chamber of Commerce (2002)
• Sold memberships to local businesses through prospecting, relationship building, cold calling, sharing the chamber benefits and closing the deal.

Emily Cook Resume – cont.
• Served as a chamber representative at various networking events.
• Top sales producing membership representative.


Product Marketing Manager, JMTek/USBDrive (2001-2002)
• Press and media marketing and relations; worked with Wall Street Journalist Walter Mossberg for product review.
• International sales and account management.
• E-Commerce, Web content creation, launch of USBMall.com
• Product packaging, press kits, brochures, sales collateral, media promotion, trade shows (COMDEX), strategic marketing and branding.

Marketing Intern, Sprague Pest Solutions (2001)
• Worked with Marketing Director and Senior Management to facilitate company efforts in advertising, marketing, public relations and corporate communications.
• Primary responsibilities included: writing, editing, proofing, creation and distribution of press releases, support of sales team, in-house publishing, newsletters, market research, website analysis, media buying, graphic design, branch office communications and media relations.

Principal Spokesperson, Tacoma Public Utilities - T.R.A.S.H.
• Traveled to local elementary schools as part of the Tacoma Recycles and Saves Habitat assembly program to educate youth about the benefits of recycling.
• Received Presidential Commendation issued as the EPA’s Environmental Youth Award.
__________________________________________________ _________________
Business Memberships & Affiliations
• Special Events Chair, blah blah blah..County Chamber of Commerce Ambassador’s Club. Past Membership Chair.
• Lakewood Chamber of Commerce and Tourism Task Force
• Eastern Pierce County Chamber of Commerce
• Business EXPO Marketing Committee
• Relay for Life – Tacoma and Lakewood Events (National Anthem singer)
• Communities in Schools, volunteer newsletter creator
• Tacoma-Pierce County Convention and Visitors Bureau
• Business Examiner’s ‘03 & ‘04 Women of Influence nominee
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Old 03-25-2005, 02:32 PM   #2
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Demonstrated achiever with superior proofing, editing, oral, written and interpersonal communication skills.

if you have such great skills why are we proofreading this

its always good to have someone look over your resume and how good are you oral skills


EDIT: oops forgot to read it
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Old 03-25-2005, 02:33 PM   #3
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Fresh sets of eyes are always needed.

hahah - yeah I know.. but public speaking is really important to this prospective employer.



I'm so tempted to put in "Numchux skills" (and yes, i know that's spelled wrong)
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Old 03-25-2005, 02:35 PM   #4
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Spelling and grammar look good. A few recommendations:

1. List about 3 bullets for each position
2. The bullets should use active words like "managed", instead of passive words like "responsible for"
3. You should try to quantify how you improved things instead of just saying what you did
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Old 03-25-2005, 03:04 PM   #5
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Spelling and grammar look good. A few recommendations:

1. List about 3 bullets for each position
2. The bullets should use active words like "managed", instead of passive words like "responsible for"
3. You should try to quantify how you improved things instead of just saying what you did

Too many redundant buzz words, my eyes started to glaze over. For example:

"Manage, motivate and lead convention center set up and housekeeping/catering staff"


There has to be a more concise and descriptive way of saying that, perhaps something like:

"Managed setup and operations for Annual bla bla bla Convention with XXXX number of attendees."

Oh yea, try and use the word "upscale" a few times.
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Old 03-25-2005, 03:30 PM   #6
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Old 03-25-2005, 03:35 PM   #7
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not a crow barner i see
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Old 03-25-2005, 04:00 PM   #8
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Too many redundant buzz words, my eyes started to glaze over. For example:

"Manage, motivate and lead convention center set up and housekeeping/catering staff"


There has to be a more concise and descriptive way of saying that, perhaps something like:

"Managed setup and operations for Annual bla bla bla Convention with XXXX number of attendees."

Oh yea, try and use the word "upscale" a few times.
Yeah.. it's not annual, it something I do daily -- I could just say "staff". Good point.

There are a lot of buzz words, I guess I'm just really trying to relate to what's important to this prospective employer.

I appreciate the input.
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Spelling and grammar look good. A few recommendations:

1. List about 3 bullets for each position
2. The bullets should use active words like "managed", instead of passive words like "responsible for"
3. You should try to quantify how you improved things instead of just saying what you did
Good points. Thanks.
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Old 03-25-2005, 04:06 PM   #9
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That is probably the best thing you can do; tailer your CV to the position/company you are considering. It certainly looks like you have a lot of experience at what you do. Good Luck.

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Yeah.. it's not annual, it something I do daily -- I could just say "staff". Good point.

There are a lot of buzz words, I guess I'm just really trying to relate to what's important to this prospective employer.

I appreciate the input.
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not a crow barner i see
What's a crowbarn?
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Old 03-25-2005, 04:25 PM   #11
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don't let people know you do oral.
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Old 03-25-2005, 04:26 PM   #12
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Old 03-25-2005, 04:35 PM   #13
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obviously it looks more organized and clean as a word/PDF document. I just wanted to ensure there weren't any glaring errors in it. Thanks.
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lose the summary section completely - that's what your cover letter is for.
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